Western Sample Pages

[SeqArtMark]

Really bad and raw scan of a couple of not so great sample pages I put together. Live and learn is my new motto and I learned a lot from this page (and the next). Hopefully the THIRD page is a huge improvement.

[SeqArtMark]

Page 2.

[blueknightfox]

Page 1 Panel 4 I think could have been different. Maybe putting the guns in his holster instead of what it is he's doing now. (To me in that panel it looks like he heard something outside and grabbed his guns to go check it out.

[yeticatcher]

You might need to establish where the old lady in relationship to the man. If she is in the same room, you could put her in the reflection from across the room in the mirror. If she's elsewhere in the house you might need to throw in an extra panel establish her whereabouts.

That's my two cents. Good luck!

-Tom

[SeqArtMark]

You might need to establish where the old lady in relationship to the man. If she is in the same room, you could put her in the reflection from across the room in the mirror. If she's elsewhere in the house you might need to throw in an extra panel establish her whereabouts.

That's my two cents. Good luck!

-Tom

Dangit, you're right! I have a layout that has her reflected in the mirror (in silhouette) but I guess it somehow got lost in the translation. Thanks for the crit, though.

[SeqArtMark]

Page 1 Panel 4 I think could have been different. Maybe putting the guns in his holster instead of what it is he's doing now. (To me in that panel it looks like he heard something outside and grabbed his guns to go check it out.

Good point. It was intended to be him picking up the guns and the next panel was supposed to be him putting them into his holster. That was one I really struggled with for some reason. Like, I couldn't get my mind's eye to picture someone picking up a pair of guns of a bed; total blank. But that's neither here nor there. I think there was narration in each panel which was the reason for the break. Left to my own devices, I'd rather just make it one big panel and call it good. But that's just me. Anyway, thanks for the crit.