Wibo81 wrote:Yes, you're right several people have told me not to go to publishers with a finished project. I'm moving on to different stories. Once I get everything figured out I will probably go with a dummy that has no more than 4 illustrations.
I have sent my stuff to literary agents. I've had some replies coming in. Nothing concrete just yet.
Sirspamdalot wrote:Another nice piece! But I agree that the composition is flawed.
Seems to me that the sand turret, two monsters, and shovel handle are spaced too evenly. And the height of the shovel, and side and bottom of the umbrella, align too neatly with the red monster. Also, the left edge of the sand castles blocks the rightward flow of the handed ice cream and tossed car, discouraging our gaze from flowing through and around the right half of the picture. I also feel like the monsters' colors are too saturated to properly show their distance. The green monster pops forward even more than the soldier at the far right, who should seem much closer to us.
Here's a rough reworking that might provide some useful ideas.
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